Argumentative paragraph

Last week, on Wednesday,October 24,2012. We had workshop. We reviewed about argumentative paragpraph. I reviewed Dini's paragraph. She wrote about "Smoking in public place". It told about her arguments about smoking in public place and also the effects of smoking. It gave good reasons and supporting evidence to defend the position. It also considerd the opposing views also the examples. She wrote her arguments from start to finish and also gave the conclusion of the whole paragraph of the topic. I found some mistakes from the grammatical and the spelling. For instance, She wrote "Public places". She wrote place on its context using "es" as a plural. I thought that it didn't need "es" as plural because public place is general. But she had a good idea of the paragraph which she made. 

The conclusion is we have to be careful on the grammatical of each paragraph andbe corrected.

ganbatte ::♡